"would have been to sentimental to" "she mumbled and dried to sink into the bed" - unless that's deliberate. *eg* "Somehow it seemed strange how he frightened him"? "incomprehendingly" - uncomphrehending(ly)?
Sorry, don't meant to be giving only typo check or you'll think I'm not enjoying it. I wanna hear more! And I like repeating "St Croix". St Croix St Croix St Croix St Croix...